A good friend and talented writer called me last night to offer
feedback on my recently published short story, The Buckner Brothers. In summary, she said she
liked the story and its unpredictability. She said the pace was good, as was
the rhythm. She particularly appreciated the physical descriptions of the
main characters and the way in which their psychoses evolved.
Then she lowered the boom; she said she had a hard time
visualizing where the action was taking place. The writing lacked a vivid
setting. She wanted more ambience, more environment.
So what did I do? Like any self-respecting writer, I drank
wine through a straw went back and reread the story she was referring to. Then I studied my
WIP. Yep. She’s dead nuts right.
As I looked at my writing through this new lense, it was clear - I do spill more ink on people than I do on places. Interesting. I went looking for advice from my guru,
Stephen King. In his book about writing, aptly titled On Writing, King differentiates
between two kinds of descriptive writing: the physical description of
characters and the description of “locale and texture” (his words).
I’m feeling halfway okay until I read further. King says descriptions of “locale and texture” are more important to good
writing than are descriptions of people and characters.
Wouldn't you know it.
Digging for details, I landed on this nugget:
Thin description leaves the reader feeling bewildered and nearsighted. Over-description buries him or her in details and images. The trick is to
find a happy medium.
Easy for you to do, Mr. King. But what about fledgling indi authors?
Good description is a learned
skill, one of the prime reasons why you cannot succeed unless you read a lot
and write a lot. Reading will help you answer how much, and only reams of
writing will help you with the how. You can learn only by doing.
Alrighty then, back to the doing. I just hope I don't over-describe the little girl's bedroom in the story I'm writing now. If I do, I trust that my excellent and talented friends will shove me in the right direction. Thanks, Cyndi.